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Am not a happy turtle - Morbid Angel - 12-22-2013
http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=8938&pid=39835#pid39835
I think I read that roleplay 6 times and I am just not happy with it as the first half. I could have done better. Help rip it apart so I can fix whatever is fucking me up lol
Am not a happy turtle - John Austin - 12-23-2013
What I am really seeing wrong and what is probably throwing u into a loop is there is not enough spaces with some of your paragraphs. Like where you have Steve Sayors coming into the picture, that whole long paragraph could have been spaced out more.
Also maybe there is no color as well, I know it was a little harder for me to read cause there was no color but maybe that's your thing, just my pet peeve..
Overall I enjoyed it
