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Darius Xavier · (02-18-2018)

And here I was going to chime in with the feedback I meant to give a week ago but saw that Vincent already did that. I would echo a lot of what he said above. I really enjoyed your trash talk, he seemed to have an answer for just about everything. His arrogance is clear in the writing and I think that goes a long way towards establishing how Erik views himself both as a wrestler and as a person. I think your stories are very well written and entertaining but like Vince said, there wasn't a whole lot of connection. As a judge I would want to see the stories connected in someway throughout the week and even if the stories don't end within that cycle, and say they carry into the next week then making sure to briefly summarize what has happened previously would help. Just because someone judged your work this week doesn't mean the same person will next week, and if your story next week picks up from what you started this week the judge is likely to be confused by reading. Like jumping into a movie halfway through. Just something to keep in mind but all in all I've enjoyed your work and you have steadily improved with each passing match. I also very much enjoyed your RP for Turning Point.

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