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Feedback wanted! Character : Shade
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03-08-2016, 12:49 PM

Punctuation/grammar. I don't know if you're foreign (and I don't mean to sound xenophobic) but most of the time I have no idea what you're saying. The character seems like a good base to develop, I like the whole mysterious aspect of the gimmick, but an opponent can really rip a hole if they spot an opening like a misspelt word, let alone a misspelt paragraph. One thing I would improve on is knowing was direction your character is going on as you have this brooding, mysterious, masked guy who says "gayboi" and trash talks like someone completely different, so I'd either incorporate that into your gimmick or make it known who Shade is and why he is Shade.
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Character : Shade - by Shade - 03-08-2016, 12:04 PM
re:Character : Shade - by Blue Gator - 03-08-2016, 12:49 PM
re:Character : Shade - by Shade - 03-08-2016, 12:52 PM



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