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Some feedback - Jason E Smith - 09-15-2013
The Vow
Feedback would be appreciated
Some feedback - Tony Santos - 09-15-2013
Dude, I love what you brought to the table on that promo. You set the scene, and you really let your character be himself. I loved it, to be honest. My only bit of criticism? If you're going to have a change in dialogue (which obviously includes a change in colors, separating the characters), break them out. Don't put one character's comment within another's. It just makes things a bit convoluted and annoying for the reader.
But fuck, man, good work. Keep it up.
Some feedback - John Msdison 2.Faggot - 09-15-2013
Stay positive, Jason. You've come a long way since when you first came in. Seriously, go back and look at the stuff you were putting out when you first came in. It's a pretty noticeable difference.
Haven't had a chance to read your work yet this week, but I'll try to PM you.
Some feedback - John Austin - 09-16-2013
Like Madison said, you came a long way since at least when I started. You really have stepped up on your work and it shows greatly
Also, the only real gripe I have is basically what Tony pointed out, try and space some stuff out next time, so this way it's not hard on the eyes when to read...at least for me.
Keep up the good work
Some feedback - Great Buzzard Eli James IV - 09-16-2013
I think you're getting much better. Glad to see you growing and getting better. Keep it up.