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Finis Lineae Feedback - horza13 - 05-01-2013
Hi just wanted some feedback on my first rp here at the XWF
Will send your rp's feedback as well http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=2543&pid=8463#pid8463
Finis Lineae Feedback - Steve "KingSlayer" Davids - 05-01-2013
Loved it. The description is brilliant and your vocabulary is clearly broad which I like. For me the only thing is structure, the paragraphing of that first paragraph should normally be broken up at certain points. Other than that though keep developing your character as you are and things are looking good!